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 Post subject: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Sun Feb 03, 2008 4:38 am 
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Asrai

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Location: Got an 8:30 rez at Dorsia... great sea urchin ceviche!
This work was originally intended to be the intro to a battle report. But slowly it has grown into something too big. So I thought I would present it in parts. The Actual report itself will come soon, when I get the chance to play it. We have started one game but it became too late to finish and, at this point, I'll probably suggest that we start over.

I'd consider this just part one of the intro, however. I just finished this part, and though it didn't take up the kind of space on the topic page that I thought it would, it feels like enough for now. So there will be a second installment, then a report. Unless of course this part is not recieved so well. (*crossing his fingers*)

So here it is.

The Tyrant Invades

It is ironic that, as the soft, cool breeze of the early spring carried the aroma of Ogre cookpots along the borders of Athel Loren, the smell of roasting human flesh could be, somehow, less offensive to the Asrai than the smell of the timber smoldering beneath the pots. In the forest, deep within the Ways and Glades of Athel Loren, the lonely elves gather only naturally fallen branches and limbs, the generously given timber from the ancient sentience of the woods, so that no elf should feel the need to keep or carry an axe. There are no axes there, only the fallen implements of murdered intruders: the tools of men and Dawi, and the Beasts of Chaos, buried by generations of leaf litter and root growth, forgotten by the timeless void that is the ancient wood. And inside dwellings of the Asrai, on the ledges of portals open to the sky, each elf keeps a small garden of Pineherb and Thyme, sung into life by the simple enchantments that every Asrai knows. And every fire in every hearth or traveler's camp is treated with these herbs. It is an offering of gratitude, and the Hallmark of the Covenant. So deep is the meaning of this rite that, as the many fires of the Ogre camps came out like daytime stars, the blasphemous fume called out to the Asrai, even before that impossibly low tremble that is the Forest's awareness of itself.

Even the villagers of Farcrop had taken to growing the herbs in outside gardens, growing enough during the spring and summer so that their superstitions could carry them through the winter. Now those gardens were trampled, along with the yards and landscaped greens of the village square, and the houses of those who grew them were burned down to their blackened frames. Only some still stood just half un-made, their shutters smashed in where Ogres had thrown torches to smoke out the residents inside. Fat Ogre Bulls mingled sloppily throughout the ruined town, many of them still filling their faces with the wet, pink hindquarters of pigs, sheep and dogs, the less valuable meats. Many of them were passed out on their backs or cradling their spears, gorged to unconsciousness from compulsive gluttony. Wretched gnoblars clambered stupidly around them, bickering with each other over shards of glass and scrap metal. But standing among the horde were several of the larger Ogres, Ironguts they were called, their backs straight at attention and cudgels in hand. Their deep breaths yielding hot banners in the chilled morning air. These were the ones that Reneai had eyes for the most. For when a host commander sets his camp, where he puts his sentries reveals much of what he plans.

The shadow sentinel coasted from bush to bush, silent as the wind, he wove along the treeline. His Waywatcher kin followed his lead, one at a time in a spider-walk scout formation. Stoically, they surveyed the horrific scene.

The Tyrant, Mastighot, had harried his Ogre host down from the southern mountains to raid this settlement of men in the night. The village of Farcrop had been swarmed. Mastighot had settled his camp on the eastern edge of the village, with his back towards the forest. The rubble of Farcrop set squarely between his camp and any Bretonni magistrate that might happen by in search of taxes. Not very likely, that. Farcrop lay deep to the South of Quenelles, far beyond the reach of even the most greedy of Lordlings. The people of Farcrop call themselves Bretonni, but it is the Forest that they pay homage to.

But Mastighot didn't understand that. The Tyrant was young and naive. A generation ago, when Mastighot's sire, Hammelghot, had come down from the mountains for human slaughtering, he had loaded the backs of every spare Bull with timber from their own sparse patches of Highland woods. A gnarled old Irongut himself, Hammelghot understood that harvesting the wrong firewood so close to Athel Loren was like turning over a rock with a thousand snakes under it. But Mastighot was young and eager for blood and battle. His Ogres had carried weapons, only weapons.

Fat Ogres care nothing for the elements. No tents or other such shelters had been erected to house Bulls. Only one massive structure made of deerskin, still bearing its fur and dripping, soggy with blood. Reneai knew that the Tyrant was in there, mating with Ogre bitches on filthy deerskin rugs. Some of the salvageable houses had been taken over by Ironguts, their revelry was no more than bellowing and roaring as they drank away the Ale they had pilfered from the town.

Human carcasses lined the village green by the hundreds, hanging by their feet in ranks and files. Their blood drained wantonly, mixing in burgundy pools too thick for the soil to drink. Their hellish battle line ending by a make-shift kitchen where Butchers worked to separate human flesh from bones. Returning the slabs of meat to the racks, they tossed the bones into pots for stock, adding rain sodden tree bark and muddy grass for aromatics. Just beside one of the Butchers was, what had to be, the last remaining goat in the entire village, curiously chained to the Ogre workshop. Setting a pot to the fire, the Butcher quickly loosened its bonds, and lifting the beast by the neck over the pot, he dragged a blade across her ripe utter, spilling blood and milk inside; a macabre bechamel. The line of human heads on the table behind him, their skulls broken open, made it clear what the purpose of this dish would be. Tomorrow, the Tyrant would dine on human stew. Tonight, Mastighot would wet his pallet on human brains... in a "lite cream sauce."

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 05, 2008 11:21 pm 
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could somebody respond to this? It would mean a lot to me. :D

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I like it. Even if the ogre diet is... ugh-worthy.

That tyrant deserves what is coming to him. But then, all tyrants do. Death to ogres!

(Picking nits: Nieve means snow in Spanish. If you want a cool word for ingenuous, it is naive :lol:)

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 12:33 am 
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Nieve means snow in Spanish. If you want a cool word for ingenuous, it is naive )




Duly noted and fixed. Thanks. :)

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 10:53 am 
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Can't wait to see the battle report. Have you thought of using some special scenario? Something like ambush the village...

The text is well written but it has to continue, otherwise you don't know that there is going to be a battle.

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Your portrayal of the ogres gorging is grotesque and bestial. You seem to have a knack for presenting ogre culture. Can't wait for episode II!

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 Post subject: Re: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Wed Jun 10, 2009 7:10 pm 
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Your Ogres are certainly very colourful in their diet. Morgan Spurlock would love it.

That said, you potray Ogres in a very lifelike (if such a term can be applied to a fictional character, although who else is it applied to?) manner. It is very easy to see these monsters stomping around a camp, the human corpses hung for eating purposes, and even the Butcher has a lot of character, (although having tried myself, a bechamel is difficult. So, is this the Gordan Ramsey of the Orge world? Organ Ramsay, to add a pun? I envy Orges, my life is sad).

However, the way you nicely blend in the Wood Elf perspective without making it the end-all be-all of the story (Wood Elf A is very angry!) and focusing on Ogres through Wood Elf eyes is very nice. So much so, when I write my next short stories for my Kera series, I shall be looting it, in the style of my Deffskul Orks.

Back to my point, the background information on the Wood Elves in invaluable. Clearly, you're very talented and possibly have written a lot of Wood Elf fluff. If you have more, post it.

[I may be reading it wrong, but was this made 2 years ago? The dates appear to be 2007. If so, just where is the second half? You can't start a story like this and then not follow through!] I'd also like to say that I did read this before I wrote my short story, although the devil is in the details, and with a deeper reading, all the healthy goodness comes out.

In a typical british accent,"good show, old boy!"

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 Post subject: Re: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Wed Jun 10, 2009 7:15 pm 
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No, wait, I'm an life. I've been reading 'Joined' and assuming it when it is posted.

Sorry!

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 Post subject: Re: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Wed Jun 10, 2009 7:22 pm 
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Location: Got an 8:30 rez at Dorsia... great sea urchin ceviche!
The second half was supposed to be a battle report, but since I lost the battle I never bothered writing the report. I might have to anyways, just write a battle that sounds awesome and lands solidly in the win column for me. Thanks for your feed back. All this "Halls o' Loec-in'" makes me nostalgic so, since I have some time on my hands, I might as well make something up.

I've also been spending most of my time in the Druchii mentality, which sounds messy, but I've been spending more time on my Welfs lately so I have more incentive to finally finish the story.

I have some stuff on file that I've been meaning to convert to PDF and to post. It would be way too long for standard thread format. I think I'll make it a point to do it now that I know someone will read it.

Oh! And what's so hard about a bechamel? The trick is plenty of high heat and lots of stirring. If the cream isn't at least 165-180 degrees it will turn out like vomit. You need the heat to keep it smooth. And make sure you're using cream and not milk. Milk will scald.

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Relief washes over me in an awesome wave."

In the winter,
The long and hallow eaves of the willow
Dance like the shadows of Loec.


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 Post subject: Re: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 1:00 pm 
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By the way, I've now mastered the bechamel sauce, and now all shall flee from my creamy goodness! Thank you for the contribution, and looking forward to the stories.

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 Post subject: Re: The Tyrant invades.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 1:50 pm 
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That was hilarious!

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Relief washes over me in an awesome wave."

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Dance like the shadows of Loec.


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